沪江考研携手海天教育有奖参赛征文[11]

[名师点评]这次改过的已经不错了，挺好的！！！第一段有个语法错误。

When it comes to the ideal professional standards, colleage students hold their own ideas. According to the bar chart, it is not difficult for us to find that the stability and salary of a job are seriouly taken into consideration, while ignoringpersonal development is ignored by most of us（缺主语）.

What leads to this situation? There are, to my mind, plenty of contributing causes, among which the following ones are particularly worth mentioning. Firstly, the job is thought as a tool used to make a living rather than to win merits for oneself. Secondly, we live in a materialistic society and are taught early on to be realistic. It is unavoidable to seek for security from future jobs. Moreover, I might also cite individual characters as a reason.

From my standpoint, it is rational to consider the stability and high salary, which pave the way to comfortable life, as two of the important factors in choosing a job. Simultaneously, it is also necessary for us to think over our interests and future development, which can lead to happy and colourful life. After all, happiness is the foundation of the life.