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People have the illusion that they can do anything with money. Just as what is shown in the picture, by paying a penalty, people can give birth to more children, factories can let out the polluted air directly without any treatment, and trees can be felled at will.

This is a very serious social problem. Compared with other countries, China has a larger population but more limited resources. If everybody behaves in the similar way, it would be far beyond the country's capacity to guarantee everyone a well-off life. Moreover, it was reported that to bring up one child costs 350,000 yuan, which means that a family with several children bears a heavy burden. Meanwhile, if factories do not take any measure to treat the polluted air, the atmosphere will be further contaminated. Also, the felling of trees will surely lead to soil erosion, while frequently occurring sand storms are humans' deserved punishment for deforestation.

Though taxtation is one of the methods to punish this sort of behavior, it is never the only way. Solving these problems reflected in the picture depends largely on our responsibility to society and environment. If the sense of responsibility is greatly aroused, harmony between man and the environment will not be far away

评：此篇文章结构清晰，主次安排得当，事实与观点结合比较充分，遣词造句比较熟练，可见作者有一定的英文功底，整篇文章不需要做改动，是一篇佳作，考研中定是一篇高分作文。