名师帮你修改考研英语作文（9）

第三篇(wwathujian)

Dear Cathy,

I am writing to invite you to join our self-tour to Hangzhou in whicha（A）nne andi(I)vy, two of my friends, have decided to take part.

Hangzhou is one of the most beautiful cities in our country, evenall over(around) the world. You may have heard the heart-breaking and touching tale on Lady White Snake which was said to take place just in the very city. Hangzhou is surely a place of interest deserving to take some time to pay avisit(to). Moreover, anne and ivy are really nice girls who are easy to get along with,(.)Iassure(am sure) you will like them and you three will become good friends.

I heartly wish you could consider my suggestion and join us. I am looking forward to your quick reply.

Yours sincerely

liming

评：此文章段落结构安排合理，所述切合题义，引用的例证也具有代表性，可以说，作者很好的表达了自己的观点。美中不足的是，在一些语法细节问题上面，如人名的第一个字应该大写，还有些固定搭配没有很好地处理，希望在这一方面应该有所改进。