沪江考研携手海天教育有奖参赛征文[14]

[名师点评]第一段应该再把最低的那个点描述一下。一般这种图表图都要描述出最多和最少两个部分才行，做一个鲜明的对比。对于本文也就是说要出大学生对于个人发展的淡漠，这样才能形成鲜明的对比。

另外如果是正式考研的 话，要避免字数超出过多，会扣很多分数。还有就是前面给其他同学的建议也看一下。

From the bar chart above, we can safely draw a conclusion that most univeristy students view steadiness, high salary and self-development as the ideal career standards. What is revealed in the chart should claim our attention and is well-worth being discussed in the public arena.

The problems we can get from the chart are as thefollowingfollows. First and foremost, most of the university students are reluctant to take challenges, which has been shown in the bar chart, for many students make steadiness as their top priority when it comes to job hunting. To some extent, this indicates that most students lack of confidence and are intimidated by the difficulties facing them in the future life. Secondly, most students are money-oriented and self-centered. As is indicated in the chart, high-income and self-development are regarded as another important factors with regard to their ideal career standards. This fact implies that most students are not perfectly willing to serve the people and repay the society. All in all, the ideal job standards of the current university students should be modified.

As for me, I think some decisive measures should be taken to re-establish the noble career standards among the students. To begin with, a far-reaching campaign should be launched to make sure that the students can scrap their deep-rooted misconceptions about ideal job standards. In the second place, we should keep on carrying out the blueprint of building a harmonious society. Only in this way can we see more students with the spirit of self-sacrifice and willingness to make a major contribution to the society when they are hunting their jobs. At last but not least, our central and local governments should do more in terms of college student employment, offering guidance and instructions to the graduates.

Hopefully, a new work values will be set up and all the studens can find their ideal jobs.