沪江考研携手海天教育有奖参赛征文[5]

[名师点评]文字表达还需要加强，语法上要看一下非谓语动词那部分。这篇作文有一些跑题，其实本文核心应该是反映学生希望找稳定的，高收入的工作而放弃个人的发展，文章要探究出这一原因。

The ideal standard of profession at university students’ heart
According to the bar chart,we can see that there are several kinds of standardstandards of for selectingprofessionprofessions at modernnowadays university students’ heart.With the regard to the ideal mind of work,stabilization topped the list,about 96%,with fat salary and developing possibility respectively rank the second and the third,nearly 77% and 65%.And the percent of interest and achievement is a little low,one is 50% and the other one is 26%.

In my opinion,there are three reasons caused改为causingthe situation.Firstly,the global financial crisis are breaking out so that more and more companys are reducing their staff.So we students all want to search for a relatively steady position to earn money. Secondly,with the improving of people’s living standard,the commodity price has a sharp rise as well.Therefore,we have to demand the high income to deal with daily expends.At the same time,we emphasize identically the development of the job,as the saying goes:The soldier who doesn’t want to become the general is not a good soldier.Besides,it is also important that the interest and the sence of achievement in the progress of finding jobs.

As far as I am concerned,it is not necessary to find a steady,rich and promising job when we leave school just now.We can practise in some small places to learn because a lot of unites need we have these work experience. As long as we do everything with our hearts from the bottom of our hearts, we mustwilllget success.