沪江考研携手海天教育有奖参赛征文[4]

[名师点评]本文写作文字很好，写作思路也很清晰。再注意一点即可，即大作文一般都是第二段或中间段落是主要段落，在长度上要衡量好，第一段只是简单描述即可。而且这种图表作文中，第一段一般描述出最高点和最低点就可以，中间的部分一般可以一句话带过，不用每个bar都描述。而且一般结尾段也要比开头段长，避免头重脚轻，虎头蛇尾。

When it comes to the ideal vocational criteria for the college students, opinions differ from person to person. As we can see clearly from the bar chart, 96% of them take the stability of a job very seriously while only 26% take that whether they can make great achievements in certain job or not into consideration. Moreover, 77% of the students hold that a high salary is indispensable and another 65% expect space for self-development in an ideal job. Half of the students insist that an ideal job should meet their interests.

The reasons, as far as I’m concerned, can be traced back to the deeply-ingrained thought that stability is the top priority when choosing jobs and that’s what our parents have always been instilling in our mind. Probably we Chinese people are yet to be accustomed to ups and downs in jobs. People would like to seek security from their jobs both financially and psychologically.

As for me, an ideal job should, first and foremost, interest me from which I can get a lot of gratification. Then the enthusiasm will contribute to my effectiveness and efficiency, which as a result will benefit me in all aspects definitely.