沪江考研携手海天教育有奖参赛征文[3]

[名师点评]本文写作思路清晰，但是这位同学在处理词性方面还要加强。另外英文写作有两大必注意的要领。1，如果一个动词有名词形式，就不用其加ing变为名词的形式，如development而不用developing。2，可数名词不能以单数形式出现，要么加复数结尾，要么前面用冠词等限定词！

As is shown in the bar chart,we can see clearly that the standard of choosing a job in改为amonguniversity students.It shows that almost every university student need needsa stable job,and some of students care about high pay payment,developing development,and interesting interest. The last index which only 26 percent of students choice choose is to gain good resultresults in the job.

These statistical data inflects deeply the mind of modern students. From 1980s, "iorn bowl" job is always chased by job hinters.Until now, under the job-finding pressure, stable job is still the centre topic in college students.At the same time, in the thought of investing a great amount of money in school, the students take the high pay into account. It is also indicates that the modern students are thoughtless of their interests and contributions expect study.