名师帮你修改考研英语作文（5）

第一篇（wimtt123）
 

A first glance at (At first glance,) this cartoon tells us that a matchmaker is attempting to create a crush between a man and a woman. But the veil on the head of the bride-to-be covers the fact that she is old and ugly, (which is) quite opposite to what the matchmaker is advertising (advertises). The picture further points out that the matchmaker symbolizes false advertisements and the woman low-quality products.

The cartoon subtly reveals a phenomenon frequently happening in our society-the false commercial advertising and promotion (products). Their emergence firstly owes to the negative effect of a growing market economy which emphasizes competition. Economic loser (losers) fail (failed) to learn the lesson in retrospect, and dedicate themselves (\) to cheating customers instead of improving the quality of products and services. False advertisement,(\) seems to be (the) most convenient (way) to attract clients and increase profit in the short run.

However, false advertising can greatly endanger individuals and the whole society. In the long run businesses may damage their own images by fake propaganda, which hurts consumer (consumer's) confidence. As the Chinese saying goes, "those who play fire are bound to get burned", it is only by genuine advertisement and qualified products that an enterprise can prosper.

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