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第一篇（wolkebang）

The picture symbolically illustrates (that) deforestation is becoming increasingly serious and depressing around the global. In the cartoon, even the only remaining (remained) tree, bald and begging for its(\) life, is facing a lumberman's axe. What is more, the sun, the field and the atmosphere are shining (in) eerie colors, which can(\) infer(s) that the pollution on the earth is also drastic and terrible.
The drawer (artist) is sending a message about the significance of the environment protection (to us). Undoubtedly, the economy development is essential for prosperity of our country, flourish (prosperity) of our nation, and happiness of our life. Unfortunately, as (while) economy is booming, our environment deteriorates sharply. We are so development-oriented that we have almost sacrificed our blue sky and beautiful landscape for the purpose of obtaining a little material gain.

As a consequence, it is imperative for us to take drastic actions. One the one hand, the factories should stop excessly (excessively) exploiting the forests and inordinately polluting our planet. One the other hand, there should be an increasingly severe measure from government against evildoing for personal profit.

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