【原】It makes me feel painful to think that she has to work 12 hours a day and seven days a
【改】It pains me to think that she has to work 12 hours a day and seven days a week.
【原】It will be our aim to ensure proper health care for each and everyone of the Chinese people
【改】Our aim is to ensure proper health care for all Chinese.
【原】This book will help you master the basic elements of good writing
【改】This book will help you master the basics of good writing
【原】The search of the forest that they conducted was entirely complete
【改】The search of the forest was complete
【原】Whenever anyone telephoned her to ask her for help with their homework she always obliged right away.
【改】She immediately obliged anyone who telephoned for help with homework.